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14-11-10, 03:18 PM
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You might want to rephrase it, perhaps something like this:
"At the base of the tree, what seemed to be a discarded pink tissue, on closer examination, turned out to be candy coloured fungi".
It says the same thing with half the amount of words.
It has nothing to do with offensive language, but possibly more to do with grammar and brevity. What I think is wanted is a concise description of what is seen in the image rather than how you came to spot it, so even my version could be cut down quite a bit. Give it another try.
PS. It might be a good idea to research the fungi so you can give it its correct name. For instance it might have been Pink Waxcap (Hygrocybe calyptriformis). I just googled pink fungi and got that one up, so it's not difficult to do.
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